The map illustrates the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The map illustrates the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words
The maps show how a village
which
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called Stakeford has devolved over the
last
eighty years .
Overall
, the maps show the difference between 1930 and 2010 and what has changed there.
To begin
with, in the 1930s,there was some farmland in the north and west of town.Surrounding the road,there were located some shops and more places for gardens.
Furthermore
, the road for the garden and the bridge was closer than in 2010.
Moreover
, some of the buildings were swapped for their structure . The second plan illustrates that the river stoked and the overpass stayed the same,
how
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as
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it was before .
For instance
, the bridge and post office
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were located East of
township
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the township
a township
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.
Also
, the large house returned to the retirement home.And all of the farmland and shops were disappeared .
However
,in 2010 years the number of post offices increased.And a total of stores joined after a few years.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • town
  • population
  • transformed
  • bustling
  • road network
  • residential areas
  • industrial sites
  • commercial zones
  • river
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • schools
  • hospitals
  • shopping centers
  • educational facilities
  • healthcare facilities
  • urbanization
  • development
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