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Band 2.5

Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also people nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#smoker #people #places
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 scale , we all know that smoking can harm
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 of the smoker and the people around him yet as
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 bad habits
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 a personal
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 to smoke or not . Smoking in public
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 harms not only children but
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 too harmful for individuals with heart diseases and even
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 healthy people so
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 totally agree that it should be banned in public
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 . Banning smoking in public
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 can promote a healthier environment and encourage smokers to reduce or quit their habit. Public smoking bans can reduce litter from cigarette butts, helping to keep public spaces cleaner and more appealing.Enforcing a public smoking ban can help protect children and vulnerable individuals from the harmful effects of tobacco smoke.
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 there should be some spaces for smokers to do their willing job without bothering others .
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 agree with smoking banning in public
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 think it would be good to provide
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 like smoking rooms in popular
places
 like shopping centers or subway stations and airports .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • respiratory diseases
  • health issues
  • promote a healthier environment
  • reduce or quit
  • litter
  • cigarette butts
  • enforcing
  • vulnerable individuals
  • public health concerns
  • individual habits
  • shared spaces
  • designated smoking areas
  • compromise
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