There is a problem with the changing room in the sports centre that you visit.You have complained several times but with no success Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre.In your letter: •describe what the problem with the changing room is •say what happened last time you complained •explain what you want the manager to do
Dear Sir or Madam,
I'm Ravshanva Mushtariy. I'm writing in order to complain about the sports
centers
that I visit Change the spelling
centres
oftenly
. The condition of the changing room is Correct your spelling
often
such
a dissatisfaction and I believe that the problem will warrant your attention.
My first concern is the poor cleanliness in the changing room. The floors are wet and slippery and it's causing a dangerous environment.It's because last
time I visited there I almost ended up being injured.
Correct article usage
the last
Also
, some of the lockers are broken and lack of the lockers are
creating Correct subject-verb agreement
is
such
a big issues
. Added to Correct the article-noun agreement
big issues
a big issue
this
, changing
room has an unpleasant smell and I think it's unhygienic. Correct article usage
the changing
Furthermore
, there's also
problem
with the showers. Add an article
a problem
the problem
Last
time I visited there, I was disappointed. It's because I ended up not finding any locker to place my stuff.
I would like to request that,it would be great if there was a purchase of additional lockers. Correct article usage
The last
Furthermore
, it would be great if you maintain
the cleanliness of the floor and Wrong verb form
maintained
try
to avoid slippery so it would be less dangerous for the users.And I would love to see changes in the showers
Thanks for your attention to these matters
Yours faithfully ,
Ravshanova MushtariyWrong verb form
tried
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coherence cohesion
Ensure the logical flow by structuring paragraphs more clearly. For instance, keep each complaint separate and fully detailed in their own paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Avoid merging multiple ideas in the same paragraph. Separate issues like cleanliness, lockers, and showers for better clarity.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriately formal and polite, fitting the context well.
task achievement
The overall tone of the letter is suitable for a formal complaint, reflecting concern and polite urgency.
task achievement
All parts of the task are addressed, including describing the problem, detailing a past complaint, and suggesting solutions.
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- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
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