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The pie charts compare the percentage of users across different age groups on Twitter, Facebook, and YouTube.

The pie charts compare the percentage of users across different age groups on Twitter, Facebook, and YouTube.
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The
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 pie charts provide information about the
age
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group
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 distribution on these
three
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 platforms, namely Facebook, YouTube, and
Twitter
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.
Overall
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, the majority of
Twitter
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users
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 are between 18 and 34,
while
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 the 35–39
age
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group
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 is the same among the
three
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. The smallest proportion belongs to seniors (65 and older) on all
three
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 platforms. Mostly, Facebook is popular between two
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groups
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, 18-34 and 35-69, with nearly the same share, respectively, at 29% and 30%.
Users
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 aged between 50 and 64 account for 90%, and 10- to 17-year-old teenagers make up 14%. Meanwhile, only 8% of Facebook
users
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 are over 65. On YouTube,
on the other hand
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, the largest portion of
users
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 are in the 35-69
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group
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, which accounts for 29%, followed by the 18-34
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group
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 (26%). The remaining 45% are divided among the other
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age
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groups
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 of people 50–64, 65+, and
users
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 who are 10–17 years old, with a respective 20%, 10%, and 15%.
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,
Twitter
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 has a notable dominance with 40% (18–34) among the other five
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groups
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. The second-largest
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group
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, people aged 35–69, is responsible for 29% of its
users
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, and 18% of
Twitter
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users
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 are people aged 50–64.
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 but not least, the oldest and youngest
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groups
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 account for only 13% together, 4% and 9%, respectively.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, age, group, twitter, users, groups with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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