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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.
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The line chart below illustrates the proportion of Australian
exports
 to four different countries between 1990 and 2012.
Overall
, it can be seen that at the
beginnig
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beginning
 of the given
period
Add a comma
period,
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exports
 to
Japan
is
Wrong verb form
were
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dominated
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dominant
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, but close to the
end
 of
this
 time
exports
with
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to
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china
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China
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 demonstrated an increase and reached
its
Correct pronoun usage
their
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 peak
at the
end
. At the start of the given
period
, Australian
exports
 with
Japan
 saw the
greates
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greatest
 rate with just under 25%,
while
exports
 to the US took the second place. From 1990 to around 2007 the percentage of
exports
 to
Japan
is
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was
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dominated
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dominant
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, but decreased slightly from above 25% to just around 18%,
whereas
,
exports
with
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to
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 India increased moderately
in
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at
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 the same time, and
after
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apply
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reached
its
Correct pronoun usage
their
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 peak in 2012 with approximately 28% and
exports
 into
Japan
 continued to decline to the
end
 of
this
period
. Regarding
to
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apply
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the other 2 countries, the proportion of
exports
 with the US fluctuated over time
,
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apply
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 and decreased from 10 % to around 5 %
at the
end
 of the
period
.
Additionally
, there was
an
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a
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 slight increase from 1990 to 2010 in the percentage of
australian
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Australian
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exports
 with India from below 5 % to roughly 7 %,
however
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however,
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 it declined again from 2010 to 2012 by around 2 %.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, period, japan, end with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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