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Band 5.5

An organisation has given an advertisement for part time volunteering job for local children. Write a letter to the administrator of the organisation in your letter introduce yourself Why you think you are suitable for this. Job State when you will be able to join

#organisation #advertisement #part #time #job #children #administrator
Hello, dear sir/madam. My name is Anastassia, I'm
pensioner
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a pensioner
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, with more than 25 years
experience
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of experience
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 in nursing. I have seen your advertising about volunteering with local
children
in
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on
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a
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apply
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social media. I think it's the perfect idea to
acquainted
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 the neighbours and support the weak families. I hope I'll have an opportunity to participate in
this
 amazing project. I have a lot of experience with toddlers, I had grown up
3
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with 3
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children
, and I have 5 grandchildren.
Moreover
, I have a license in medical dogs, and both of my dogs are therapy dogs. We want to suggest our help
fot
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to the local
children
 - dog therapy in small groups,
furthermore
, I can do it privately with the
children
 who need it. Of course, I will do it
free
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for free
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. So, if you think that it would be useful for our community, let me know, please Looking forward to your message. Best regards. Anastassia.
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grammar
Ensure your sentences are complete and grammatically correct. For example, 'It's the perfect idea to acquainted the neighbours and support the weak families' should be 'It’s a perfect idea to get acquainted with the neighbors and support families in need.'
content development
Consider expanding on why your experience with children and therapy dogs makes you particularly well-suited for this role.
task response
You clearly introduce yourself and outline your relevant experience.
greeting and closing
You close the letter politely and express a clear interest in the project.
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