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The bar chart compares the total number of vehicles per one thousand people in China who owns a car in the years 1987 to 1999.

The bar chart compares the total number of vehicles per one thousand people in China who owns a car in the years 1987 to 1999.
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the chart
illustrate
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 the total
numbers
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number
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 of cars per every thousand people in
china
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China
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 who
owns
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owned
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 a car in
years
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the years
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 between 1987 to 1999
overall
, it can clearly
seen
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 that the number
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upwards
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 trends throughout the period. in 1987 it was just
alomst
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almost
 50 cars per thousand
of
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apply
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people
wich
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which
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 is the lowest amount in
the
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all years . and the numbers
countinue
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continue
 increasing
drmaticly
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dramatically
.between 1991 and before 1995 there was
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a slightly
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slightly
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 increase . and
arrive
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arrived
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to
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at
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 200
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vehicles
vechicles
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vehicles
 in 1995 and it
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continue
continues
countinue
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continued
 increasing until 1999 the proportion of vehicles
show
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showed
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 a phenomenal resurgence to the high point .accounting around 415 vehicles
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which
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wich
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which
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 is the highest number
throught
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through
throughout
 all the
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periods
periodes
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periods
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • comparative data
  • vehicle ownership
  • per 1000 people
  • economic growth
  • rising income
  • year-on-year increase
  • significant jumps
  • data points
  • urbanization
  • industrialization
  • infrastructural impact
  • environmental impact
  • plateau
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