The diagram below shows how oil is expected in use of production of perfume
The following diagram represents how
oil
is used as a part of perfume production.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that it comprised
Add a missing verb
is comprised
with
four key processes: heating, vapourization, condensation, and Change preposition
of
seperation
. Correct your spelling
separation
However
, it is interesting to note that they applied the basic knowledge of sciences, especially in terms of temperature and density.
Starting with heating as the first step, the fire boiled up the water
in a big large flask. When the water
reached
its maximum boiling point, it will generate Wrong verb form
reaches
a
steam that Remove the article
apply
flow
above the Change the verb form
flows
water
and wind
through along the pipeline. Fix the agreement mistake
winds
Secondly
, this
stage known
as Vapourization, as the steam undergoes Add a missing verb
is known
the a
rectangular Choose an article
the
a
tank
filled with aromatic plants in order to fuse with desirable scents and created
Wrong verb form
create
a
steam with Remove the article
apply
oil
vapor
. Change the spelling
vapour
Third,
condensation, the product from this
phase continue
to the spiral and spring-like pipeline called condenser on the top which Change the verb form
continues
fit
inside the two distinct Correct subject-verb agreement
fits
temperature
of Fix the agreement mistake
temperatures
water
Add an article
the water
a water
tank
. The heated products release its
heat Correct pronoun usage
their
while
traveling
down to Change the spelling
travelling
lower
level, the warmer Correct article usage
a lower
water
stay
on the top and Change the verb form
stays
pumped
out of the Add a missing verb
is pumped
tank
whereas
the cooler water
is pumped inside to cooling
it. Eventually, Wrong verb form
cool
this
process turn
Change the verb form
turns
a
Correct article usage
apply
steams
into liquid form, making it Correct subject-verb agreement
steam
a
Remove the article
apply
water
mixed with essential oil
. Lastly
, the mixture will flow to the seperator
Correct your spelling
separator
tank
which will seperate
the essential Correct your spelling
separate
oil
out of the hydrolat or aromatic water
. Generally, oil
is much denser making it float on the top of the tank
which is easy to distinguish it from water
and pumped out through a connected tube.Submitted by kamonluck1999 on
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