The table shows the percentage of people with mobile phones who use various features on their phone between 2006 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the percentage of people with mobile phones who use various features on their phone between 2006 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table depicts data on the proportion of
residenta
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residents
resident
who used
smart phones
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smartphones
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with varied applications on their phone, observed for
4-year
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a 4-year
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period from 2006 to 2010.
According to
the data, the phone's
feature
to make calls was the highest
feature
that
use
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was used
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by residents in 4
year
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years
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, it almost reached
perfect
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number
on
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100%.
Furthermore
, sending and
receive
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receiving
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text messages was the second greatest figure
that
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used by residents
although
it grew slowly
at
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73% in 2006, 75% and 79% respectively, every 2
years
later, followed by
take
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the take
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photo
feature
that increased
5
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by 5
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% each year and reached 76% at
last
.
On the other hand
, the
proportions
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proportion
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of
citizen
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citizens
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who used
play
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to play
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games, play music, and
record
video
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videos
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were below 50% during the 4
years
stages. Meanwhile, there was
a
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incline from 0% used
record
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video
then
rose moderately to 9%, and peaked at 35% in 2008.
Nevertheless
,
this
record
video
outraced
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was outraced
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by the
feature
of
search
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searching
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the internet, which started with none of
residents
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the residents
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use
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using
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thi
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this
the
feature
in 2006,
then
inclined significantly to 41% and 73% only in the 2
years
separation. In conclusion,
at the end
of the phase, more than a half
percentages
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of
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the citizen
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citizen
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citizens
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were
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apply
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used features
such
as
make
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making
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calls,
take
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taking
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photos,
send
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apply
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and
receive
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receiving
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text messages.
wherease
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where
under 50% of citizens were used
play
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to playing
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games,
play
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playing
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music, and
record
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recording
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video
during during a phase of 4
years
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words feature, years, record, video with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • features
  • usage
  • between 2006 and 2010
  • trends
  • increasing
  • decreasing
  • popularity
  • basic features
  • advanced features
  • internet browsing
  • playing games
  • significant changes
  • emerging trends
  • speculate
  • comparison
  • over time
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