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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the people that do not have a
job
 to work spent
time
 doing some activities for the
last
 year. In general, both
men
 and
women
 spent their
time
 on
housework
 , shopping and
job
 hunting in the morning.
However
, in the afternoon ,
men
 watch TV and
women
also
 spend
time
 doing the
housework
. Having looked
the
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 chart for more details,
it is clear that
, 22% of
men
 in the morning spent
time
 shopping the most,
job
 hunting and
housework
 had slightly lower percentages, 19% and 20%. There are three main activities that
men
 spend
time
at
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.
Women
also
 had 3 activities the same as
men
, but
housework
 was the highest percentage with 49% ,which was much more than
men
. In the afternoon, it had
a
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slightly changed.
Men
 spent
almost
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most
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time
 watching TV
with
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14%, gardening,
job
 hunting and visiting friends or relatives had nearly changed by about 12-13%.
However
,
women
 still spent
time
 on
housework
 í the most with 21%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words job, time, men, women, housework with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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