Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people lives. Other think that adults life brings more happiest, in spite of great responsibility. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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life

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can spend their time on having

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going through hard

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in the right way

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their dreams and goals,

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their future lifestyle and providing

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the

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needed for themselves.

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than teens. In conclusion,

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differences

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and

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with problems. In my opinion, all

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to live , nobody can define any age group

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hippest.

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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people lives. Other think that adults life brings more happiest, in spite of great responsibility. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries, people who commit less serious crimes are made to undertake community service* instead of a prison sentence. Some people believe that all people who have committed a crime should be sent to prison. Do you agree or disagree?

More and more students are going abroad for higher studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages?

Air and water pollution have become serious concerns worldwide. What are the primary causes of these environmental challenges, and what steps can individuals and governments adopt to mitigate them?

Some people say that too much attention and too many resources are given in the protection of wild animals and birds. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?