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In some countries, people waste a lot of food which is bought in shops and restaurants. What do you think are the reason? What can be done to solve this problem?

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Some individuals, who live
in particular
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 domains, are more likely not to consume their meals purchased in comparison to other countries' citizens. In my opinion, persuading people to buy menus and poor durability of
food
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 are the most significant reasons
of
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this
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pheomenon
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phenomenon
.
However
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, there are solutions in order to eliminate
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 problem.
As well as
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 other sectors, there is
an
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outrageous competition in
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food
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the food
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 business. Every brand comes up with new promotions to increase their sales. In
this
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 context, restaurant menus are indispensable for them. Business owners, whether it is
frenchaise
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 or small
establishment
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establishments
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, offer
so called
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 affordable menus to tempt people. They especially set their prices to be bought more.
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 1 piece of
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food
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a food
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 item is 1 pound,
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, 4 pieces of them, which is
menu
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the menu
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, can be bought for 2 pounds. Yet,
this
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 scam can be solved by the
hand
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hands
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 of
government
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the government
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. They may implement regulations to value meals fairly . Another factor that needs to be taken into account is
durability
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the durability
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 of
food
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. Some dishes, especially fast
food
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, are prepared to consume instantly. To make them one-off meals,
manifacturers
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manufacturers
 use various chemicals.
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, there is no way to eat them later. Mc
Donalds
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Donald's
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 products
for example
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. Have you ever heard that their products can be eaten
next
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the next
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 day? But, massive organisations
such
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 as WHO can tackle
this
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 problem by banning those chemicals. In conclusion, by effective price control and eliminating particular chemicals,
food
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 waste
issue
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issues
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 can be resolved once and for all.
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, it is only possible with the effective schemes of local and worldwide organisations.

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task achievement
Your essay addresses the prompt well and presents clear ideas. However, there are a few areas where the explanations and examples could be more detailed or specific. For instance, discussing the impact of food promotions and chemical use warrants more depth and clarity to fully support your points. Try to provide more elaborate examples and details to strengthen your arguments.
coherence cohesion
While your essay is logically structured, there are some occasional awkward phrasings and sentence structures that can confuse the reader. Additionally, some transitions between ideas could be smoother. Work on refining your writing to enhance clarity and flow.
introduction conclusion present
You provide a clear introduction and conclusion which frame your essay well. This helps in establishing the context and summarizing your stance on the issue.
complete response
Your essay sticks to the topic and does not deviate from the main task. The main points you present are relevant and contribute to addressing the issue at hand.
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