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The maps below show the changes that took place at a science and technology museum between 1996 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the changes that took place at a science and technology museum between 1996 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the maps
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the development
in
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of
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 a science and technology museum in 1996 and 2016
overall
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, it can be
clearlz
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clearly
 seen that there is
a
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apply
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primary changes have been in both years
inclouding
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including
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 new facilities . in 1996 , there
was
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were
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 writing desks in the southwest corner above , and under of it there was
steam
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a steam
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engine
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exhibition
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 and diesel
engine
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exhibition
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 in the
meddle
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middle
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, and there was
cafe
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a cafe
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 beside the reception , and
front
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in front
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the
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of the
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 steam
engine
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exhibition
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 and diesel
engine
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exhibition
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 there was a print
room
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 and library ,and in outside there was
i
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I
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 a car
park
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 took
phenomenal
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the phenomenal
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 area from the entire land . in 2016 , the writing desks
have been
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were
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 replaced
to
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in
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the comuters
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comuters
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Comuters
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room
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 and the library has been
relocate
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relocating
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to
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apply
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beside the
comuters
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room
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 and the cafe
has been
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was
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 converted to
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a resturant
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resturant
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restaurant
restaurants
 and the reception
has been
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was
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 increased in size and the print
room
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has been
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was
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 replaced by
digital
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a digital
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 technology
room
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 ,
while
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 the small part on car
park
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 made to bicycle
park
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 , above the car
park
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 , a VR
room
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 and
slolar
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solar
 wind
room
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 have been added to
place
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the place
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 .

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words engine, exhibition, room, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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