The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar charts illustrate the proportion of male and female employees aged between 60 and 64 in
Belgium
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, the
USA
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,
Japan
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, and
Australia
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from 1970 to 2000.
Overall
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, men's proportions decreased significantly from 1970 to 2000 in all four countries.
However
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, the situation was slightly different for women.
While
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in
Belgium
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and
Japan
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, women between 60 and 64 employment
rates
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declined slightly from 1970 to 2000, the
rates
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rose slightly in the
USA
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and
Australia
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. Male employee percentages dropped dramatically in
Belgium
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from 1970 to 2000 from 79% to 19%. In the
USA
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, it dropped slightly by 18% in 2000
while
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In
Japan
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and
Australia
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, the same reduction in the
rates
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happened.
Australia
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lost almost one-half of their 60 to 64 employee proportions from 1970 to 2000 , and
Japan
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lost almost one-third. Females aged between 60-64 percentages decreased insignificantly in both
Japan
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and
Belgium
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to become 40% and 7%, respectively, after they were 43% and 8%. A slight increase happened in
Australia
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and The US. Women between 60-64 employee
rates
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became 18% and 39% in
Australia
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and
USA
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, respectively in 2000, after they were 16% and 36%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words belgium, usa, japan, australia, rates with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rate
  • Percentage
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Fluctuation
  • Gender disparity
  • Trend
  • Decline
  • Improvement
  • Variation
  • Noteworthy
  • Aligned
  • Comparative analysis
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