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The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts the amount of money
spending
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for
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on
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 fuel across the whole
level
 of community in the US and UK.
Overall
, we can see that there is
increasing
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an increasing
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 trend among poor
poeple
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people
while
htis
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this
his
 feather
decrease
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decreases
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 in the richest
level
 of each population. Looking at
line
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the line
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 graph in more detail, it is evident that
while
 the percentage of income is
cilmbing
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climbing
 people spend a rising amount of money
for
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on
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 fuel until the
level
 of middle-income in
UK
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the UK
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.
This
 figure
fluctuate
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fluctuates
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 between 3 and 4
percent
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per cent
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untill
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until
 the middle of
richest
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the richest
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. Surprisingly,
after
this
stage
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stage,
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a
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an
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 escalation
begin
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begins
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 in
feul
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fuel
 spending
level
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levels
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. Regarding
to
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apply
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the US population it is notable that for spending
feul
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fuel
 peak
a
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apply
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the highest number (over 5) in the middle of poor people, followed by
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a graudly
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graudly
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gradually
 fall
the
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in the
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 rest of
population
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the population
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. It is seeable that in between middle-income and richest spending
feul
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fuel
feel
 is
equel
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equal
 for both of country (the low of 4
percent
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per cent
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)
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words level with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditures
  • disparities
  • evolved
  • fluctuations
  • stabilization
  • significant gap
  • trends
  • economic conditions
  • vehicular technology
  • public transportation
  • summarise
  • comparison
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