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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the
high ranked
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 countries for production and consumption of electricity in 2014 and considerate for ten different countries.
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, it is readily noticeable that
the
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China
occupying
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 one of the highest countries in both
producing
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production
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 and
consuming
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consumption
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.
In contrast
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, Korea
whereas
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 the lowest.
According to
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 the chart, China
was
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represented above of 5,000
billion
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kilowatts
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 in
consuming
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consumption
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 and
producing
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production
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then
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 United States came in second place
whereas
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 the production was higher than consumption
nearly
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 4,000
billion
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kilowatts
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 respectively.
furthermore
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, Russia and Japan were as same in both approximately above 1,000
billion
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kilowatts
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.
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to
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, Russia has the same statistic with both exhaustion and output. Consuming in India and Canada where less than producing by roughly two hundred. France, Brazil, Germany and Korea demonstrated
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a steadily
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steadily declined
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steady decline
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of
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in
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 figures. Germany where the only country
consumption
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with consumption
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was
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exceeding production accounting for 56
billion
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kilowatts
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, kilowatts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual aspect
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • industrial base
  • population size
  • significant difference
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • electrical energy
  • ranking
  • economic patterns
  • industrial patterns
  • technological advancements
  • disparity
  • industrial development
  • economic capabilities
  • anomalies
  • export
  • import
  • energy efficiency
  • waste
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