The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the
high ranked
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countries for production and consumption of electricity in 2014 and considerate for ten different countries.
Overall
, it is readily noticeable that
the
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China
occupying
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one of the highest countries in both
producing
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production
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and
consuming
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consumption
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.
In contrast
, Korea
whereas
the lowest.
According to
the chart, China
was
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represented above of 5,000
billion
kilowatts
in
consuming
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and
producing
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then
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United States came in second place
whereas
the production was higher than consumption
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4,000
billion
kilowatts
respectively.
furthermore
, Russia and Japan were as same in both approximately above 1,000
billion
kilowatts
.
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, Russia has the same statistic with both exhaustion and output. Consuming in India and Canada where less than producing by roughly two hundred. France, Brazil, Germany and Korea demonstrated
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steadily declined
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of
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figures. Germany where the only country
consumption
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exceeding production accounting for 56
billion
kilowatts
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, kilowatts with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual aspect
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • industrial base
  • population size
  • significant difference
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • electrical energy
  • ranking
  • economic patterns
  • industrial patterns
  • technological advancements
  • disparity
  • industrial development
  • economic capabilities
  • anomalies
  • export
  • import
  • energy efficiency
  • waste
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