You would like a job working in the summer camp which runs sports and outdoor activities for children and young people. Write a letter to the organisers of the summer camp. In your letter, •explain what sort of work you would like to do na •describe your personality •say what relevant experience and skills you have

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you to express my interest in your job advertisement for a summer camp that I saw posted on
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university. I am
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student at Bobsan
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. Living in the U.S.A. is expensive and I need extra money
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to cover my financial demands. Nowadays, I am not busy
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is because summer season and there are
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. When it
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my personality I am very sociable and extroverted. I talk with my friends, my fellow students and others every day and I can get with them quickly. Before starting
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I come to the U.S.A. through Work and Travel
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for summer jobs. At that time I worked in one of
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gyms as a trainer.
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work experience taught me some skills as communicating with children and young people. If I may, I will contact you next Monday to discuss
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job. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jack.
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Avoiding minor mistakes and ensuring consistent use of articles, punctuation, and correct forms will help your writing improve.
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Provide more specific details on the kind of work you want to do at the camp.
coherence cohesion
Using transition words can enhance the flow between sentences and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
The letter follows a clear structure with an appropriate greeting and closing.
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The content covers most points mentioned in the task prompt.
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Personality traits and prior experience are adequately described, showing relevance to the job.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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