The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
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The given pie charts illustrate information about the average proportion in four different meals of three types of nutrients, which brings problems to health if overeat.
Overall
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, what stands out from the graphs is that
,
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generally speaking,
the
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breakfast
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for most Americans is healthy.
While
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the remaining meals are relatively unhealthy
due to
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the excessive intake of some
substance
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. For the first graph, the largest
part
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of sodium is dinner, with a proportion of 43%. Followed by 29% (lunch),
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breakfast
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and snacks occupy the smallest
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, both of them are 14%. With regards to the second graph, dinner takes up the largest
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of 37%,
by contrast
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,
breakfast
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is still the smallest
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, which is 16%. Lunch occupies 26%, which is bigger than 21% of snacks. Take a look at the added sugar, the
breakfast
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only takes up 16%,
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snacks are approximately three times as much as that in the
breakfast
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. Meanwhile, lunch and dinner occupied almost the same, with about 20%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words breakfast, part with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average percentages
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • meal
  • typical meals
  • categories
  • high percentage
  • distribution
  • patterns
  • trends
  • nutrient-dense
  • data
  • comparison
  • summarize
  • reporting main features
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