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You recently went to a movie theatre to enjoy a movie, but unfortunately, you left your jacket there. Write a letter to the manager of the movie theatre about the jacket. In your letter, • describe the jacket • describe where you were seated • explain what you want the manager to do about it

#movie #theatre #jacket #manager
Dear Sir or
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Madam
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madam
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Madam
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, I'm writing to ask for my
jacket
 that left there 3 days ago. I am hoping my
jacket
 will be found as soon as possible. I recently went to your theatre to watch the movie called "The
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Future
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" which is the greatest movie about
future
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the future
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. To be honest I really enjoyed
from
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it. But
at
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in
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 the
end
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end,
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 I left my
jacket
 which is my favourite one and the worst part is it
has
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had
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 my
driver
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driver's
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 license
on
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in
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 the left pocket. It was
black
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a black
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jacket
 that
made
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was made
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 from leather. And one of the important
information
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pieces of information
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 is about seats. We had planned to buy a ticket for the front seats. As I was coming with my friends,
this
 became a problem because of the money. Some of my friends
told
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 that they don't have enough money to pay. So we preferred the back seats. You will find it
in
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here. I would be very grateful if one of your workers
can
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could
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 search for it. I hope I can drive here
with
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in
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 my car but as I said my
driver
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driver's
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 licence is left too. I want you to bring my
jacket
 to my home so I'll pay for it. And here is my address "21361 Waite Street, Wildomar, Riverside County, California, 92595, United States". And for any other
information
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 you are able to call my phone number which is (739) 037 8721. I look forward to hearing from you! Yours faithfully, Mr Uktamov
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task achievement
Make sure to specify the exact seat number or row to make it easier for the manager to locate your jacket.
coherence cohesion
Try to organize your ideas into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea or piece of information.
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a polite and respectful tone, which is suitable for a formal letter of this nature.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriately formal, adding to the overall professionalism of the letter.
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