the table below highlights data on the number of travellers using three major British airports between 1998 and 2003. summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.

The table illustrates the proportion of people who
traveled
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from
greatest
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British airports over a six-year period from 1998 to 2003.
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, the most visitors were for
Gatwich
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Gatwick
airport
which was 69.3
millions
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in 2003 ,
while
the least one
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for Stansted
airport
which was 17.3
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in 1998. The table indicates that the total
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number of travelers
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travelers
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in
Gatwich
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Gatwick
and Stansted
airport
were
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increased gradually ,
while
in
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Heathrow
airport
it had ups and downs from 1998 to 2003. It can be seen that the most people who visited Heathrow
airport
were in 2000 ,
where as
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for other airports it happened in 2003. There was not any change in
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of
travelers
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in
Stansted
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the Stansted
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airport
between 2001 and 2003.
Travelers
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in Stansted were not as many as in
the
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Gatwich
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Gatwick
. The number of
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were
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doubled from 1989 to 2003
in
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Gatwich
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Gatwick
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, which was the most popular
airport
among the others.
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task achievement
Ensure that all data mentioned from the table is accurate and appropriately annotated. Misreporting data can confuse the reader and negatively impact your score.
task achievement
Improve the introduction to better paraphrase the given prompt. For instance, the phrase 'greatest British airports' should be replaced with 'three major British airports' to match the prompt closely.
coherence cohesion
Provide a clearer and more detailed conclusion that summarizes the main trends and findings of the table rather than just mentioning one last point about Gatwick.
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical flow of information to ensure paragraphs are more smoothly connected. Use linking words appropriately to guide the reader through your report.
task achievement
You have correctly identified and described the overall trends presented in the table.
coherence cohesion
The essay included specific details and figures from the given data, which adds credibility and specificity to the analysis.

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