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This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.

This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph gives information about the proportion of recycled
materials
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 in various countries divided
by
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 four types between 1980 to 2010. The unit measures in per
cent
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.
Overall
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, the graph of recycled
materials
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 fluctuated. In 1982, the highest number of recycled objects was
paper
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 and cardboard about 65 per
cent
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.
Glass
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 containers were the second-ranked number at 50 per
cent
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.
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, Aluminum cans were recycled in 1986 for the first time and their percentage was significantly small compared to
paper
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 and
glass
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 just around only 5 per
cent
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. In 1990, when plastics were recycled for the first time about 5 per
cent
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. The number of
paper
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 and
glass
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 recycling declined slightly from 1986.
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, the recycling percentage of Aluminium
materials
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 gradually rose to 10 per
cent
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, which is double in the past.
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, after the year 1994. There is an upward
trend
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 in
Aluminiums
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Aluminium
,
Glass
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 objects and plastics recycling.
However
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,
paper
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 and cardboard material has a downward
trend
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 in the same periods.
To sum up
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, the 1982 to 2010 period.
Paper
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 and cardboard have a downward
trend
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.
Nevertheless
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,
Glass
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 containers, Aluminium packages and Plastics had an upward
trend
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.
This
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 graph shows the proportion of four different
materials
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 that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words materials, cent, paper, glass, trend with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • increased
  • paper and cardboard
  • plastic
  • glass
  • metal
  • significant increase
  • relatively stable
  • fluctuating
  • period
  • starting
  • reaching
  • gradually increasing
  • remained low
  • experienced
  • showed
  • greatest
  • proportion
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