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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line chart shows different sources of
air
pollution
 in the UK over a period of 15 years.
Overall
, the industry was the main source of
air
pollution
 in 1990 producing 5
million
 tonnes,
however
, it fell dramatically from 1993 to 1996.By the way, transport remained at the same level by producing 1
million
 tonnes of
air
pollution
. In 1990, households and transport were producing the same amount of
air
pollution
 being
inconsiderable
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an inconsiderable
the inconsiderable
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 source of
air
pollution
.
By contrast
,industry by producing 5
million
 tones back
then
,was the major source of
air
pollution
.
However
, we can see the that industry showed a decreasing trend and ended up producing 2
million
tones
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tonnes
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 in 2005 which is a significant change.
Also
, household sources showed a falling trend and resulted in producing a negligible amount of
air
pollution
 in 2005.
In addition
, there were no changes in transport sources,they remained stable producing 1
million
 tonnes of
air
pollution
 each year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollution, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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