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LETTER TOPIC. You are looking for a full-time job, and recently you saw a job opening in an advertisement. × introduce yourself × explain what sort of job you would like to do × and say what experience and skills you have You should write at least 150 words.

#topic #job #advertisement #sort #skills
Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Sevinch Muxtorova and I'm writing
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 to your advertisement for a
Hotel
 Touristic System. My current job title is
English
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 teacher. I am writing to apply for the position of translator. I'm writing to express my interest in the translator position at your
hotel
. It would be an honour to start my career with your
hotel
, and I am excited to have the opportunity to be able to work with a reputable
hotel
 like yours. I have
complated
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completed
 my graduation from Korean INHA University and my major was Tourism and Hospitality. Afterwards, I
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worked
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 years as an English teacher,
however
, I want to switch my job because of
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 salary. I am a native Uzbek speaker and have ample knowledge of English and Korean. I possess the right combination of translator skills to be an asset to your Touristic System. I appreciate your consideration
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 application and look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Sevinch Muxtorova
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Consider providing more specific examples of your translation experience to strengthen your application.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your sentences flow seamlessly by using more cohesive devices such as conjunctions and transitional phrases.
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The introduction is clear and concise, and you have explained your interest in the job clearly.
coherence cohesion
Your letter demonstrates a logical structure with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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