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The supplied pie charts above represents the data collected in 1980 and 2000, about units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France

The supplied pie charts above represents the data collected in 1980 and 2000, about units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France
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The pie charts show the
production
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 of electricity using five different fuel sources in Australia and France in the years 1980 and 2000. In 1980, the largest source of electricity in Australia was coal, which made up half of the total
production
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 at 50
units
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. Both natural gas and oil contributed equally, with 20
units
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 each. Nuclear power accounted for the smallest share at 10
units
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. By 2000, coal
production
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 increased significantly, making up the majority of electricity
production
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 at 130
units
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. Meanwhile, natural gas and oil dropped dramatically to only 2
units
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 each.
Hydro power
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Hydropower
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production
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 rose to 36
units
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, becoming the second most important source. Nuclear power,
however
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, was no longer used, with its
production
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 falling to zero.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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