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The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart delineates the number of
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 three kinds of fast food were consumed by Mauritian teenagers from 1985 to 2015.
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,
while
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 the consumption of hamburgers
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 Fried chicken had an increasing trend in these 30 years, pizza was less and less eaten every year. As the chart depicts, the most popular fast food among Mauritian offspring was the first pizza eaten 60
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 in 1985.
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, teenagers' interest in Hamburgers rocketed every 5 years and witnessed 10
times
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 growth until it reached just over 70
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.
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, fried chicken was first consumed the least among the others but soared by 60
times
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 and levelled off in 2005,
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 grew slightly to reach around 63
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. Despite the other two, pizza's rate plummeted, as it dipped from 60
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 eaten to 50 in 1995, moved to 30 in 2005, and finished its downward trend by 10
times
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 consumed in 2015, becoming the least favourite among these fast food lovers.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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