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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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Intial
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 analysis of
graph
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 reveals production levels in
energy
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units
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 of
petrolium
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petroleum
,coal and natural
gas
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 in Britain
during
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between
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 1981 and 2000.
Overal
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, petroleum remains the lead fuel in
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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 despite fluctuations.
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, coal being produced the less in the
beggining
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beginning
 of period proceeds declining
further
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.Natural
gas
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 showed a steady upward trend, gaining the most production levels .
Petrolium
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Petroleum
 accounted for just under 100
energy
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units
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 in 1981. It
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 prohibitively proliferated to 140 after 5
years
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 and dramatically fell to 100
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at
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the same time later .
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, by
the
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1996 it stayed static at 140
energy
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 to a million tonnes of oil. Turning to natural
gas
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, its manufacture remained at 40
energy
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units
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untill
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until
 1990.From that, the figure for
gas
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rised
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raised
rose
rises
 to 80 in
aroung
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around
 6
years
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 and climbed to 100
energy
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units
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 eventually. Coal, standed at 80
energy
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units
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 for approximately 3
years
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 before halving.It
then
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,
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 managed to increase by 20 and remain static for just a few
years
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 .
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, coal's
energy
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units
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 rampantly decreased for the left period , producing around 35 in the 2000
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, units, gas, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "static" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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