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Band 4

You work for an international work. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: • describe the training course you want to do • explain that the company could do to help you • say how the course will be useful for your job

Dear Sir or Madam, I'm writing
to
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this
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 letter to request that you can aid me adjust my
work
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positive
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 as I want to
work
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 in other nations. First of all, one of the main reasons why I want to
work
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 in the company's head office. I believe that I can't keep a good earning condition under
such
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environment, which means may affect my working efficiency
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and cause
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 the business benefit.
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, I would be greatly
gratefully
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 If you could
agree
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this
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 request. I want to
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 in a senior position because I need more money. I would appreciate it if you would allow me to take two days from a week because if I
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 time off, I would have done the task you want me to do more than you expected. Thank you in advance
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for your kind help. Yours faithfully, Shabnam

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea to improve clarity and flow.
task achievement
Provide more specific details about the training course, including its name, duration, and the skills it offers.
task achievement
Maintain a formal tone throughout the letter and avoid casual phrases like 'more than you expected'.
task achievement
The letter has a clear purpose and communicates the request effectively.
coherence cohesion
Appropriate greeting and closing used which suits the formal tone of the letter.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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