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The pie charts compare the percentage of users across different age groups on Twitter, Facebook, and YouTube.

The pie charts compare the percentage of users across different age groups on Twitter, Facebook, and YouTube.
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The diagrams show how often three social media apps-
Twitter
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,
Facebook
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, and
YouTube
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- are used across five distinct
age
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 groups.
Overall
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, people aged between 18 and 49 predominantly use social media, with
Facebook
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 and
YouTube
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 particularly popular among those aged 35 to 49,
while
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Twitter
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 is predominantly favoured by the younger demographic (18-34).
In contrast
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, The seniors (65+) show the lowest percentages of usage across all three platforms . Middle-aged individuals (35-49) make up almost one-third of the
Facebook
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 user base, making them the primary
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 of
Facebook
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, with the second highest percentage of
users
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 being youth (29%). Other older
age
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 groups, people aged 50-64 and 65+,
in contrast
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, use
this
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 app significantly less as opposed to other social media apps, with 19% and 8% representation, respectively. Interestingly, the youngest
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group
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 (under 18) uses
Facebook
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 at a similar rate (14%) to
YouTube
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 (15%). Regarding
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 consumption, just like
Facebook
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, its main consumers are middle-aged people, comprising 29% of
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, closely followed by the younger
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group
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 (18-34) accounting for 26%.
While
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 50-64 aged
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 constitute 20% of
YouTube
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’s audience, the oldest
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group
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 contributes only 10%.
Twitter
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,
on the other hand
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, is the platform for youth (18-34) who represent 40% of its user base. The following largest
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 of
users
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 is made up of middle-aged, at 29%,
also
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 mirroring their
YouTube
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 usage. Among the oldest and youngest individuals,
Twitter
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 is the least utilized platform with only 4% and 9 % usage, respectively. Notably, older individuals (50-64) show similar low engagement regarding all three platforms, with percentages hovering around 18%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words twitter, facebook, age, youtube, users, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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