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The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Nowadays, the consumption of fast
food
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 surpassed. A wide range of individuals ate
this
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food
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due to
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 the lack of time or they did not have the time to cook
food
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. The presented diagram demonstrates the usage of junk
food
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 among youths in Mauritius for 30
years
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 from 1985 to 2015.
Overall
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, pizza was the most
food
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 consumed in 1985.
However
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, It reached the trough in 2015,
while
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 the hamburger peaked at the top and dominated the diagram.
To begin
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 with, the hamburger was eaten 10
times
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 per
year
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 in 1985. The consumption of hamburgers skyrocketed in 2000 to 40 per time per
year
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. The usage increased in the same pattern and reached the top of the shelf. On the other side, the fried chicken use showed an erratic pattern. It stood at 5
times
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 per
year
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. It showed a gradual increase to 20
times
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 per
year
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 in 1995. After 5
years
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. the number doubled to 40
times
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 per
year
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.
Furthermore
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, the amount of used fried chicken soared to 60
times
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 per
year
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 and remained stable for 10
years
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 until 2010.
Then
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 a slight increase happened in the
last
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 5
years
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.
In addition
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, the pizza was at the top. It plummeted to 40 in 2000. There was a significant decrease in the usage of it.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, years, times, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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