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The table below shows the result of a survey asked 6800 Scottish (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the result of a survey asked 6800 Scottish (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table illustrates the outcome of a questionnaire, which is attended by 6800 Scotland citizens aged between 16 and 74, that asks if they carried out cultural
activities
 in the
last
 1 year.
Overall
, among all age groups, it is clearly seen that youngsters
had
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 taken part in
activities
 more
significally
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significantly
 by now.
Also
, figures show that computer-based
activities
 are the least favourable choice for all ages compared to others Less than a quarter of Scottish survey attendees chose to
busy
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 with particular performance acts, and 35% of them aged between 16 and 24.
Besides
, in
relevant
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 category,
attendence
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attendance
 of
youngest
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 age group is the most significant in visual arts, writing and computer-based
activities
 with the proportion of 30%, 17% and 10%, respectively. When it comes to senior Scottish people, they wanted to
busy
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 with crafts mostly with
the
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 ratio of more than 1 in fifth. In terms of
last
-placed
activities
, computer-related ones did not get more attention in comparison to others. From all age groups, only 6% of survey attendees declared that they had taken part in these acts.
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