The charts below shows the average percentages in typical meals o three types of nutrients l, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

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The pie chart shows the average percentages of

Sodium

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, Saturated fat and Added

sugar

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in 4 different common meals. It is obvious that Snacks have

got

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apply

show examples

more Added

Sugar

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than

other

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the other

show examples

three

type

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types

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of meals.

By contrast

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, most

percentage

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of the

sodium

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is in dinners compared to other

sncaks

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snacks

, breakfasts and lunches.

It is clear that

Linking Words

percentages

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per cent

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of the snacks have added

sugar

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in their caloric content.With almost the same

percentage

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nevertheless

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,it is not about added

sugar

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but

Sodium

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contains 43

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percentage

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per cent

show examples

in dinners.

By contrast

Linking Words

Sodium

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is not common in

snack's

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snacks'

show examples

caloric content

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apply

show examples

containig

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containing

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apply

show examples

only 14 per cent of them. In fact,all of the three types of

nutrient

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nutrients

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are in the same

percentage

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being common in breakfasts.If we come to

lunhces

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lunches

sodium

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and saturated fats are the most common nutrients which contain 29 and 26 per cent,and the least common nutrient is added

sugar

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which is in 19 per cent of them.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "by contrast".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar, percentage with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 6 times.

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3
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

153 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Saturated fat
Trans fat
Sodium
Carbohydrates
Cholesterol
Processed foods
Nutrient density
Dietary guidelines
Metabolism
Chronic diseases
Cardiovascular health
Obesity
Diabetes
Hypertension
Recommended daily intake (RDI)
Nutritional label
Food pyramid
Balanced diet
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The charts below shows the average percentages in typical meals o three types of nutrients l, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Although parents are responsible for raising a child, outside influence plays a key role in their development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that good teamwork is what makes companies successful. Others feel that it is more important to have a good leader. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that children should not watch television because it has negative effects, while others believe that televison helps children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.