The charts below shows the average percentages in typical meals o three types of nutrients l, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
The pie chart shows the average percentages of
Sodium
, Saturated fat and Added sugar
in 4 different common meals.
It is obvious that Snacks have got
more Added Verb problem
apply
Sugar
than other
three Correct article usage
the other
type
of meals.Change to a plural noun
types
By contrast
, most percentage
of the sodium
is in dinners compared to other sncaks
, breakfasts and lunches.
Correct your spelling
snacks
It is clear that
42 percentages
of the snacks have added Replace the word
per cent
sugar
in their caloric content.With almost the same percentage
, nevertheless
,it is not about added sugar
but Sodium
contains 43 percentage
in dinners.Replace the word
per cent
By contrast
, Sodium
is not common in snack's
caloric content Change noun form
snacks'
by
Change preposition
apply
containig
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containing
in
only 14 per cent of them.
In fact,all of the three types of Change preposition
apply
nutrient
are in the same Fix the agreement mistake
nutrients
percentage
being common in breakfasts.If we come to lunhces
,Correct your spelling
lunches
sodium
and saturated fats are the most common nutrients which contain 29 and 26 per cent,and the least common nutrient is added sugar
which is in 19 per cent of them.Submitted by talgattan4ez on
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