You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment.In your letter • describe the problem with the equipment • explain how this problem is affecting your work • say what you want the shop or company to do

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to complain about

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equipment

for my

job

Firstly

,there are lots of problems with my

equipment

and it does not work.My new computer

is work

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properly.

Furthermore

, my computer table

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broken when it

supplied

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was supplied

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and my printer's colour

were

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mixed.

Also

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I can not use

this

equipment

for my

job

Secondly

,these all problems will

harmfull

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harm

job

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example

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I can not get

good

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salary and my work may decline.

Also

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I can not contract

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with

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another famous company. I will get fired

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from my

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job

and I can not improve my

qualification

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qualifications

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Furthermore

, my director

wil

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will

changed

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job

. If you refund my money fully I would be

gratefull

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grateful

or you can

repaired

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all

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apply

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equipment

Also

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you can change my

equipment

to another one.Did not

supplied

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equipment

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the equipment

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because I want to go

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your company and get my all

equipment

. I look forward to hearing from you.My number : 944960528 Yours faithfully, Rajabov Aziz

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task achievement

The letter addresses all the points requested in the task, but more specific details about how the problems are affecting your work would strengthen the response.

coherence cohesion

Improve the logical structure by organizing your letter into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a single point (problem description, impact, and your request).

coherence cohesion

The salutation and closing of the letter are appropriate and polite.

task achievement

The tone of the letter is suitable for the context of a formal complaint.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

160 words

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