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The diagrams show how the layout of a school library changed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams show how the layout of a school library changed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate the
developement
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development
 which took
place
 for a school
library
 in 5 years. At first glance it seems there is no differences between two pictures of study
place
.
However
, if concentrate on the parts, they demonstrate what
have
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has
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 been changed
scince
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since
science
 five years ago. In order we will talk about the changes
of
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to
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 the
library
 parts.
First,
the top
book shelves
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bookshelves
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is
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are
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 the only
place
 which did not
moved
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move
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 during these years but the other one became Descks for student's laptops.
Nevertheless
, studying tables which were
on
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in
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 the
center
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centre
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 of the
library
 changed the usage
for
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of
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private
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the private
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area
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areas
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 of study for the students.
Second,
on the left buttom of map many changed happened. Three rooms
where
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were
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 located
on
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in
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 that area which were
Classroom
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the Classroom
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,
Meeting
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the Meeting
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 room and
Borrowing
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the Borrowing
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 and returning
desck
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desk
 in sequence.
Todays
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Today
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this
place
 is used for four rooms Recording studio, Meeting room, Borrowing and Returning. The
Library
 office
where
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which
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were
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was
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 on the right corner replaced by
Conference
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the Conference
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 room. The desks which
used
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are used
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 for computers
currrently
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currently
 are for student's laptops in the same
place
of
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for
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this
 duration.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words place, library with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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