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The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart displays the attrition of Hamburgers,
Pizza
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, and Fried
chicken
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 by teenagers in Mauritius between 1985 and 2015.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that hamburgers have a straight upward trend from the beginning to the end. Despite
pizza
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 being the most consumed junk food
initially
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, fried
chicken
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 eventually went from the less consumed to the second-ranked one. The graph shows that the number of
times
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 people ate
pizza
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 in 1985 was 60,
then
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 the number of
times
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 dropped slowly over around ten
years
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, reaching 50
times
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 per
year
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. The decline rate continued at 10
times
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 every 5
years
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 until the quantity of
pizza
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 eaten in Mauritius by 2015 was only 10
times
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 in the
year
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.
In contrast
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, hamburgers were the second least consumed junk food in 1985 at 10
times
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 per
year
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. From 1990 to 2000, hamburger consumption rose considerably to approximately 38
times
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, having equal eaten
times
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 with
pizza
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 in the same
year
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.
Afterward
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, hamburger attrition rocked to 70
times
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 in 2015, after escalating gradually in the previous
years
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.
According to
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 the figure, fried
chicken
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's tendency was the most unsteady, since it had the lowest eaten
times
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 in 1985 under 10
times
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, growing slightly to 20
times
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 in 1995. In the
years
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 ranging from 1995 to 2005, fried
chicken
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 consumption in Mauritius experienced its largest rise from 20
times
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 to 60
times
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. The eaten
times
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 of fried
chicken
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 remained the same for 5
years
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 before reaching its highest point at about 63
times
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 in 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pizza, chicken, times, years, year with synonyms.
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