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Human activities have negative effect on plants and animal species. Some people think it is too late to do anything about this problem. Others believe that effective measures can be taken to improve this situation. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nature has always helped humans survive in the world.
However
,
fulfilment
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the fulfilment
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 of
basic
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the basic
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 needs of humans
cause
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causes
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 harm to the
environment
 around us, especially plants and animals. The opinion and
believes
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beliefs
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 of people is divided when it comes to agreeing to the fact if there still is time for something to be done to solve
this
 problem or not. In my opinion,
this
 situation can be improved. Today's advanced machinery, transport and industry
emits
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emit
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 harmful gases which
pollout
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pollute
environment
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the environment
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. The
unfavorable
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unfavourable
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 environmental conditions hamper
proper
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the proper
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 growth of plants and animals. Human life without frequent usage of automobiles, airplanes, industries and factories is difficult which will continue to grow
this
 problem
further
. On the other
side
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 there are many preventive measures that can be taken to improve the situation.
Use
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The use
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 of cars needs to be substituted with the use of an
eco friendly
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eco-friendly
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 transport mode
such
 as bicycles.
This
 will not produce harmful gas emissions which will keep the
environment
 clean ensuring a positive impact on plants and animals. Heavy human dependency today on
the
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apply
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high power
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high-power
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 machinery can be reduced if alternatives are innovated eventually leading to a
condusive
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conducive
environment
 for better and longer animal and plant life.
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Strengthen your main points with more specific and detailed examples. This will better support your arguments and make your essay more compelling.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion should succinctly summarize the main points of your essay and restate your opinion clearly. This reinforces your argument and gives a strong finish to your essay.
introduction conclusion present
The essay has a clear introduction that sets out the topic and gives your opinion.
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Your essay is structured with separate paragraphs for different points, which helps in creating a logical order.
supported main points
The discussion of human dependency on machinery and potential innovations as a solution is a strong point and shows your ability to think critically.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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