Some people believe that students work better if the teacher is strict; others think it is better for students, if the teacher has a friendly approach. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.
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introduction
Begin with a clear introduction that sets up the discussion topic. Introduce both views and state your opinion clearly. This will help frame the essay properly.
logical structure
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to improve the overall structure and make it easier for the reader to follow your argument.
supported main points
Provide more detailed explanations and examples to support your points. This will make your ideas more convincing and enrich your argument.
grammar
Proofread your essay to avoid grammatical errors and to ensure clarity. Small grammar mistakes can detract from the overall quality of the essay.
conclusion
End with a clear conclusion that summarizes the main points and reaffirms your opinion. This will give your essay a sense of completeness.
task response
The essay addresses both views, which is essential for this type of task.
task response
You have shared your opinion, which is important for the 'discuss both views and give your opinion' type of task.
coherence cohesion
There is an attempt to organize the essay into different paragraphs, which shows a basic understanding of essay structure.
Fully explain your ideas
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- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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