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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The Bar Chart displays the number of
hours
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 on average that four different countries spent on relaxing activities during vacations in Greece 8/2019.
Overall
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Chinese
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 and
Americans
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 spend more
hours
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 reading books and going to the
beach
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,
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Turkish
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while Turkish
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 and
Brazilians
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 like to go to the
beach
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. All the countries used fewer
hours
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 to
visiting
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visit
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 new places, being
Americans
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 and
Turkish
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 who used more
hours
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 to
this
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 activity.
Chinese
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 tourists spent 8
hours
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 reading books, almost
doubled
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double
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 the number of
Americans
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 that used 5
hours
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,
Brazilians
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 and
Turkish
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 use 4
hours
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.
Brazilians
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 stayed
for
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on
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 the
beach
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6
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for 6
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hours
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 just 1 hour more than
Turkish
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 people who spent 5
hours
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 and double of the number
Chinese
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 that went to the
beach
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 for 3
hours
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.
Americans
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 spent 4
hours
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 relaxing at the
beach
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.
Americans
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 and
Turkish
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 spent the same amount of
hours
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 visiting places with 3
hours
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 each, tripled
Chinese
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 with 1 hour and doubled
Brazilians
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 with only 2
hours
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, chinese, americans, beach, turkish, brazilians with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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