The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
The line graph illustrates
summary
of Add an article
a summary
the summary
Correct article usage
the survay
survay
that investigated Correct your spelling
survey
Correct article usage
the reasona
reasona
for moving to the capital city of a particular country between 2000 and 2015.
Generally speaking, reasons Correct your spelling
reasons
reason
as
study, family/friends and adventure experienced Correct quantifier usage
such as
upward
trend, Add an article
an upward
while
number
of people moving with the Change the article
a number
the number
reason
of employment fluctuated throughout
15 years.
From the reasons that showed rise, Change preposition
over
reason
Correct article usage
the reason
of
adventure increased gradually. Change preposition
for
Number
Correct article usage
The number
initially
was at 10000 and reached 15000 in 2015, experiencing least
increase. Correct article usage
the least
Number
of people who moved because of their close people Change the article
A number
The number
were
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was
also
at
10000 approximately, but rose a little more than adventure, standing at 22000 in 2015. Change preposition
apply
Reason
of study experienced a rapid surge, rising from 25000 to 87000 Correct article usage
The reason
at the end
.
The reason
of
employment, Change preposition
for
on the other hand
, had a sudden increase from 60000 to 85000 in first
5 years. Correct article usage
the first
Then
the rate slowed, showing less increse
in the next 5 years. In the Correct your spelling
increase
last
third of time
, Add an article
the time
however
, reason
of
employment experienced Change preposition
for
downward
trend, declining from 92000 to 87000 Add an article
a downward
at the end
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reason with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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