The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
The line graph illustrates
summary
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a summary
the summary
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of
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the survay
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survay
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survey
that investigated
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the reasona
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reasona
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reasons
reason
for moving to the capital city of a particular country between 2000 and 2015. Generally speaking, reasons
as
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such as
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study, family/friends and adventure experienced
upward
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an upward
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trend,
while
number
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a number
the number
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of people moving with the
reason
of employment fluctuated
throughout
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over
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15 years. From the reasons that showed rise,
reason
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the reason
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of
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for
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adventure increased gradually.
Number
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The number
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initially
was at 10000 and reached 15000 in 2015, experiencing
least
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the least
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increase.
Number
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A number
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of people who moved because of their close people
were
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was
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also
at
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apply
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10000 approximately, but rose a little more than adventure, standing at 22000 in 2015.
Reason
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The reason
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of study experienced a rapid surge, rising from 25000 to 87000
at the end
. The
reason
of
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employment,
on the other hand
, had a sudden increase from 60000 to 85000 in
first
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the first
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5 years.
Then
the rate slowed, showing less
increse
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increase
in the next 5 years. In the
last
third of
time
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the time
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,
however
,
reason
of
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employment experienced
downward
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a downward
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trend, declining from 92000 to 87000
at the end
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words reason with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

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