The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instruments in 2005, 2010, 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart illustrates the ratio of students who want to play
piano
, drums, guitar
and violin in 3 particular years
.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that, whereas
youngsters increased their interest in guitar
and piano
over years
, violin Correct article usage
the years
course
became less favourable.
In 2005, Fix the agreement mistake
courses
piano
learning was the most popular among other instruments by more than 10%. It was closely followed by guitarists with slightly over than
10%. By the end of the Correct word choice
apply
half decade
, Add a hyphen
half-decade
piano
and guitar
had nearly doubled its
popularity. In 5 Correct pronoun usage
their
years
, while
guitar
learners approximately 2-folded the attraction and overtook piano
by almost 40%, piano
increased just below guitar
's level.
In a decade, the percentage of violin learners decreased gradually. At the beginning, the figure was around 10% level, but it is almost halved. Finally
, after steady
10 Correct article usage
a steady
years
, ratio
of drum learner Add an article
the ratio
a ratio
pupil
rose from approximately 5% to just under 10%.Fix the agreement mistake
pupils
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words piano, guitar, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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