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The line chart below displays the crime rates in four different countries (USA, UK, Australia, and South Africa) from 1985 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below displays the crime rates in four different countries (USA, UK, Australia, and South Africa) from 1985 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line graph illustrates how much was the level of
the
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crime in
foour
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four
 various countries which includes USA,UK,Australia and South Africa over a thirty-five-year period. A glance at the graph reveals that
burglary
 and car theft had a downward trend
at
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 the first fifteen
year
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.
However
,the
rate
 of
robbery
 levelled off with some tiny changes over the period. In 2010,the
number
 of
burglary
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burglaries
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 was just under 3500 and
then
 it hit the
peack
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peak
 at nearly 3700
number
 of
incidents
for
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burglary
 in 2011.(Which was the highest percentage of crime
rate
 over the whole year).Next,the
rate
 of
burglary
 decreased dramatically
untill
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until
 1000
number
 of
incidents
 in 2015.Afterwards,
at the end
 of the
trend
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 the
number
 of
incidents
for
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burglary
 reached roughly 1400 in 2019.
Moreover
,the percentage of car theft was approximately 2700 in 2010,just ahead of the
number
 of car
theft
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thefts
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 which was 2600 in 2019.
In contrast
,the level of
robbery
 was just around
of
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700 in 2010,compared to the
number
 of
incidents
for
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robbery
 at 500 in 2015.(Which was the lowest amount of crime
rate
 over the period).
Following
this
,the level of
robbery
 remained
unchaged
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unchanged
 from 2010 to 2019 and reached nearly 700 in 2019.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words burglary, rate, robbery, number, incidents with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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