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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
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The given chart compares the figures for the
export
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exports
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 of Australia to four countries between 1990 and 2012. As is shown, both China and India show an upward trend, meanwhile,
US
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 and Japan reveal a downward trend.
To begin
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 with, it is obvious that the export to China had
significant
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 increase, the number grew slowly from 2
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percent
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per cent
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 to 5
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percent
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 between 1990 and 2000 and it rocketed to its highest point at 30
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percent
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 in the following 12 years.
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, the number of India climbed steadily, it remained stable in the first decade and
then
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 it rose slowly from 2
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 to 7
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 between 2000 and 2010 and dropped
only
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one
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1
percent
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 by 2012.
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, Japan had the highest percentage over the period yet the trend went all the way down, it went down from 27
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percent
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 to 20
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 and
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 dropped slowly to its lowest point at 18%.
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, the number of US fluctuated in the first ten years between 9
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percent
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 and 12
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percent
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 and
then
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 it gradually fell to a low
at
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of
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 6
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percent
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 in 2010.
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, we can see that
Australia
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Australian
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product
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products
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is
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are
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 popular in Asia, especially
is
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very welcomed in China even though the figure in Japan fell over the period,
but
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the general rate still
exceed
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exceeded
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the US
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 and India.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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