The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries.

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
The given chart compares the figures for the
export
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of Australia to four countries between 1990 and 2012. As is shown, both China and India show an upward trend, meanwhile,
US
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and Japan reveal a downward trend.
To begin
with, it is obvious that the export to China had
significant
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increase, the number grew slowly from 2
percent
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per cent
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to 5
percent
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per cent
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between 1990 and 2000 and it rocketed to its highest point at 30
percent
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in the following 12 years.
In addition
, the number of India climbed steadily, it remained stable in the first decade and
then
it rose slowly from 2
percent
to 7
percent
between 2000 and 2010 and dropped
only
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one
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1
percent
by 2012.
Conversely
, Japan had the highest percentage over the period yet the trend went all the way down, it went down from 27
percent
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to 20
percent
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and
then
dropped slowly to its lowest point at 18%.
Moreover
, the number of US fluctuated in the first ten years between 9
percent
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and 12
percent
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and
then
it gradually fell to a low
at
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6
percent
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in 2010.
Overall
, we can see that
Australia
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Australian
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product
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products
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is
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popular in Asia, especially
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very welcomed in China even though the figure in Japan fell over the period,
but
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the general rate still
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US
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the US
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and India.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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