You have seen an advertisement in an Australia magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter -explain why you would like the job Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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letter to apply for
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position of
live in
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nanny you posted in Jobs-Jobs magazine. My name is Waris Saroye. I
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living in Australia
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2 years.
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, I love kids. I like to play with them
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also
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can
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teach new activities. I enjoy utilising time with
children's
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children
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. Why I am
right
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person for
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posting?
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, I have experience
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daycare.
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, I am a student of early childhood education
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, I know how to handle children in every situation.
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, I am
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experienced cook so I can prepare delicious meals for your child.
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, whenever I will be vacant. I will watch good
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movie
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and
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read good
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so that I can learn more about kids and how to take care more. Hopefully, you will consider my application. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Waris Saroye
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task achievement
Try to elaborate more on specific experiences and skills related to childcare, perhaps with examples, to enrich your task response.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea and use linking words to improve the logical flow between sentences.
greeting and closing
The letter has a clear and respectful greeting and closing, which enhances the tone.
task achievement
The writing uses a polite and suitable tone for a formal application, which is appreciated.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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