Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter ; Remind him when and where you met Tell him what kind of job you are interested in Say why you think you would be suitable for the job

Dear Mr William Jade I am Xasanov Diyorbek. We meet
in
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plane. Which was the flight from Dubai to
america
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.I was sat next to you from
left
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. After
that
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that,
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you told me you are
owner
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the owner
an owner
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of
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a restaurants
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restaurants
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and you suggested
to
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I work
one
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of your
restaurant
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. I want to work as a manager.Because I have had experience
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this
role. For the
last
five
years
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I have been working in the position of manager. But the
last
month closed. I was fired
restaurant
before the
restaurant
closed. I have always worked in
the
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restaurant
I believe that my
skill-set
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perfectly
macthes
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matches
matched
to
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the job and I am familiar with
seasonal
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the seasonal
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nature of
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a restaurant
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restaurant
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forward through creativity and like the opportunity to
both
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bring my experience and enthusiasm to
this
role
while
continuing to develop professionally and personally. I
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appreciate
apprecite
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appreciate
your consideration
for
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this
application and look forward
hearing
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from you Yours sincerely Xasanov Diyorbek
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task achievement
Ensure that you always use proper capitalization for names and places, such as 'America' instead of 'america,' and 'Dubai' instead of 'dubai.'
coherence cohesion
Divide your content into more structured paragraphs to improve the logical flow. For instance, one paragraph can be dedicated to the meeting, the next to the job you are interested in, and another for why you are suitable for the job.
coherence cohesion
Polish your language to make it more formal and coherent. For example, use connectors to link your ideas better, and ensure proper sentence structure and grammar.
task achievement
The content of your letter covers all required aspects: reminding where you met, the job you are interested in, and why you are suitable for the job.
coherence cohesion
You used an appropriate greeting and closing, which is important for a formal letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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