The bar chart below shows the top tem countries for the production and consumption of rice in 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top tem countries for the production and consumption of rice in 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The previous bar chart illustrates the
amount
of rice produced by 10 different countries (China, India,
,
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Indonesia,
Bangladesh
, Vietnam, Thailand, Burma, The
Phillipes
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Phillips
, Brazil and Japan) in thousand tons in the year 2020.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that China and India exhibited the biggest
amount
while
Brazil and Japan recorded the lowest.
Moreover
, the rest of the six countries depicted a similar portion of rice production.
However
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Buma and the Philippines demonstrated a similar
amount
as well as
Indonedia
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Indonesia
and
Bangladesh
. On one hand, China accounted
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highest figure with just over 140,000, followed by India with slightly more than 1000,000 thousand tons.
In contrast
, Brazil and Japan got a similar proportion but at the same the lowest with approximately 10,000.
On the other hand
,
although
the remaining countries (Indonesia,
Bangladesh
, Vietnam, Thailand, Burma, The
Phillipes
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Phillips
) recorded a similar
amount
, Indonesia and
Bangladesh
got the most equal one with about 35,000
as well as
Burma and The Philippines with around 10,000.
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