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The graph below shows the average daily spending of three categories of international visitors to New Zealand from 1997 to 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average daily spending of three categories of international visitors to New Zealand from 1997 to 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart compares how much three different types of international tourists average spent daily in New
Zealand
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 between 1997 and 2017.
It is clear that
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 the average amount of
money
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 that visitors for
business
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, vacations, and visiting relatives or friends spent per day reached its highest level between 2000 and 2005.
Moreover
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, on the whole,
business
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 travellers expended the most significant amount of
money
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 every day over the twenty-year period. In 1997, the average spending of the three categories of international visitors was relatively low, with people travelling to New
Zealand
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 for
business
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, vacations, and visiting relatives or friends spending respectively around 255
dollars
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, 190
dollars
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, and 115
dollars
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.
Subsequently
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, from 1997 to 2000, these three figures all experienced a significant increase, reaching approximately 325
dollars
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, 230
dollars
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, and 190
dollars
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, separately, and reached their highest levels between 2000 and 2005.
However
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, from about 2005 to 2017, international tourists reduced their costs dramatically in New
Zealand
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,
therefore
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, the average daily spending saw a notable decrease during the period. From 1997 to 2017, visitors who travelled to New
Zealand
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 to visit relatives and friends spent the least amount of
money
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 every day,
while
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business
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 tourists almost paid the most. Foreigners who visited New
Zealand
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 for holidays spent more
money
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 than those for
business
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 several times,
however
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, on the whole,
business
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 travellers contributed the most to New
Zealand
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’s tourism income.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words zealand, money, business, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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