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1 . WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

1 . WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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With the development of
the
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modern society,
people
 are increasingly
to
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looking for convenience, so some changes are planned in the Islip
town
centre
. Now the infrastructure of the
town
centre
is only consists
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 of shops and housing. There are schools and parks around the
town
centre
.
However
, in order to increase the sense of satisfaction and happiness of the citizens, the
town
centre
 is planning to make some big changes. Most of the facilities will be located in the middle of the road and it will form into a circle.
Besides
, to make it
more
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easier for
people
 to go out, the
town
centre
 will add
the
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 bus station and car park.
In addition
, it
also
 adds the road only for pedestrians, which is useful for increasing the safety of
people
.
Then
, it
also
 improves the dual
carriage way
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carriageway
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 which could reduce the accidents. In the future, the Islip
town
centre
 will have a big change and is committed to meeting the
people
's satisfaction.
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