You visit a sports centre regularly, and there is a problem with the changing rooms in it. You have complained about it several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre. In your letter, describe what the problem with the changing rooms is say what happened the last time you complained explain what you want the manager to do
Dear Sir,
I am writing
this
letter with context to the faulty water heating system of the men's changing room. The sports centre members had raised the issue
several times in past also
, but there was no satisfactory solution of
the problem has been done yet.
I want to bring it to your notice that Change preposition
to
last
month also
I raised the
my concerns regarding the Remove the article
apply
issue
mentioned above. As a result
of that a technician came to check the problem with the heating system and suggested to replace
it with Change the verb form
replacing
the
new one, Correct article usage
a
however
, the administration of the sports facility did not acted
on the suggestion given by the technician. As you are aware of the fact that winters are going on and it becomes very difficult to take Change the verb form
act
bath
in cold water after intense physical workout sessions.
In the end, I would urge you to look into the matter and try to resolve the Correct article usage
a bath
issue
soon. As
Correct word choice
This
this
issue
is hindering many members to make
full use of Change preposition
from making
facilities
of the changing room.
I am looking forward Correct article usage
the facilities
for
having a positive revert from your side.
Yours faithfully,
Jatinder.Change preposition
to
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grammar
Ensure that your sentences are grammatically correct and convey clear meaning. For example: '...the faulty water heating system of the men's changing room.' could be made clearer as '...the problem with the faulty water heating system in the men's changing room.'
clarity
Avoid repetition and redundancy. For instance, instead of saying 'The sports centre members had raised the issue several times in past also, but there was no satisfactory solution of the problem has been done yet,' consider 'Despite several complaints from members, the issue remains unresolved.'
organization
Try to organize your letter by using more distinct paragraphs for each point, such as separating the description of the problem, the past complaint, and the current request more clearly for better coherence and cohesion.
task response
You have addressed all parts of the task, clearly describing the problem, recounting what happened when you last complained, and explaining what you want the manager to do.
tone
The tone of the letter is appropriate for a formal complaint, being polite yet firm.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite