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The graph shows the amount earned by graduates of different age groups in 2002. It includes those with a degree, those with a higher degree (postgraduate) and those with other qualifications. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the amount earned by graduates of different age groups in 2002. It includes those with a degree, those with a higher degree (postgraduate) and those with other qualifications. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the weekly salaries by graduates of eight different
age
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 groups in 2002, including three types of qualifications consisting of higher
degree
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, first
degree
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, and others.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
age
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 groups between 36-40 have the highest earning others, and
people
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 aged 56-60 with higher degrees earned the most in full-time employment.
To begin
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 with, the amount earned by
people
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 aged 21-25 by other qualified was around 420 and hit a peak at approximately 820 by
people
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 aged between 36 and 40. At that time, the total earnings of the oldest
people
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 of
this
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age
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 group was roughly 690.
Moreover
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, for
people
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 aged 41-45 with a higher
degree
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 was 750,
then
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 for
aged
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those aged
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 51-55 decreased to around 720 and increased rapidly to 780 by
age
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 56-60.
In addition
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, employees aged 21-25 with a first
degree
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 had the lowest amount of money earned which was 350,
therefore
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, for
age
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 36-45, it jumped to merely 690.
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, it slightly declined to about 670 from
people
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 aged 56-60.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, degree, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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