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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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Between 1981 and 2000 Main Fuel Production had Highs and Drops , At
the
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first
the
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petroleum production started
in
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 almost 100
EU
at
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 1981
then
growed
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grew
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 to 140
EU
at
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 1986
then
 got
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dropped
droped
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dropped
 to approximately 100
EU
at
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 1991 after the drop it raised again in 1996 to be the same of 1986 to stay still until 2000 , After that the Coal was 80
EU
 in 1981 after that dropped to 60
EU
 in 1986 until it
become
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 lower in 1991 with almost 45
EU
then
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 in 1996 as 40
EU
 in the
last
 it was nearly 25
EU
 in 2000 ,For the
last
natrural
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natural
 gas started off in 1981 with 40
EU
 holding itself for the same energy units in 1986 until 1991 it raised to be closely 45
EU
 in 1996
its
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 had a huge jump to be 80
EU
 in 1996 and
at the end
 it was 100 in 2000
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words eu with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "drops" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fuel production
  • Trend
  • Steady
  • Fluctuations
  • Significant
  • Milestones
  • Turning point
  • Peak
  • Decline
  • Evolve
  • Notable
  • Summarize
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