The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The given bar charts compare the employment number of
men
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and
women
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of age between 60 to 64 in 1970 and 2000 for four nations. As can be seen from the bar charts, it is evident that hiring rates were higher in 1970 than in 2000 for both genders,
conversely
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, the figures dropped significantly in 2000. It is obvious that Japan had the highest employment rate in both years with 84
percent
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and 76
percent
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for
men
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; 43
percent
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and 40
percent
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for
women
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.
In contrast
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, the hiring number in Belgium for
men
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showed a great decrease by 60 per
cent
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,
in addition
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, the percentage of Belgium
women
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presented the lowest employment among all countries with 7 per
cent
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and 8 per
cent
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respectively in both
year
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. It is interesting to note that
women
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have only around 3 per
cent
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of discrepancy between two years,
thus
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, we can tell that
women
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showed lower turnover than
men
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, percent, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rate
  • Percentage
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Fluctuation
  • Gender disparity
  • Trend
  • Decline
  • Improvement
  • Variation
  • Noteworthy
  • Aligned
  • Comparative analysis
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